I just need some feed-back on it

[Kevyboy]

Its a peice of free verse, and i was inspired by my boyfriend and also it was a dream i had after 5 hours with him on the phone. I appriciate all constructive critasism because i am tring to improve my style of writing. Thank you in advance, "I lay there, on the soft sand, by the lapping waters of the beach; safe in the knowledge my love is by my side. As the warming glow sun slowly begins to dip behind the horizon and shadows grow across the land, I feel my hand gently clasped. I sit up. Two enthralling arms tie themselves around my waist like an all encompassing blanket of protection. I’m powerless in its embrace. I have never felt so protected, so safe, so loved. The two of us just sit watching the glory of the sun fade for its long nights slumber. I feel like a stampede could not tare down the tribute to Venus herself. Two souls sharing one space. Two hearts going one place. Two minds in loves embrace The sky morphs into a fiery red display of pure power. The moon awakens from its dreams. I turn and look deep into the soft, warm, inviting eyes of the one I love. I can see down into where the depths of souls dwell. Of where emotion burns. Of where love is born. I see the passion burning bright; Radiating the fiercest of light; Of which could easily scare off the night. Our bodies close, our hearts even more so, I lean in and close my eyes. This is what I’ve been waiting for. Two pairs of lips, softly touch, caress, entwine. I feel our bodies soar higher than any angel could ever dream, surrounded by the power of love and light, which this meeting of souls has made. I never want to leave this moment, but I know I must, if only to soar once more. I open my eyes and gaze upon the owner of my heart, my soul, my star, and I know we both felt the pure intensity of our connection. Speechless we sit, just holding each other with the stars watching us, protecting us and I know; He is my destiny. He is my life."

[Awaken]

So thoughtful and heartwarming Great writing.

[gameover]

you didn't have an option for "Art is not a good or bad or right or wrong, and whats important is how you feel about it" I really enjoyed it. Very nice.