This is some examples of my meager attempts at poetry so... yeah...enjoy!

What would you do if it was all I said,
to keep you inside my spinning head.
And all Iwant to do is tell you hwo I feel,
A dangerous temptation all too real.
My heart is burning is a burning hole, empty,
just like the affections you stole.
I can see you and whats to pass,
But I can't reach you through that icy glass.
What is it holdong me back?
What is it my torn heart lacks?
All I wish is to be with you there,
But my wish come treu is all too rare.

Okay I am willing to accept blunt criticism so please be brutally honest and tell me how I can improve my writing. It would be very aprciated, and if you want you can PM me. I'm thinking about submitting this on and will most likely have more soon. Thanx all!