as it is, i think it should stand alone as a short story.

you create excellent atmosphere in your writing. it has a fresh style....
and it matches your dark little smirk, and that fiercely angelic glint in your eyes it takes a thinly harnessed lunatic to create such interplays between the spark of illumination, and the heavy shroud of shadows.

or, like neuro said ..."kinky"
(you're the kind of girl who i'd allow to bind and dominate me in a candlelit room anyday, heh)